I don't want to lose you
but I already did
I want to keep you close
but your already so far away
I want to hear your laugh
and see your smile
But I never will
you're not here
I miss you loads
but that, you don't see
You think I don't want to
be with you anymore
I hate me for not daring
to take the chans
You would probably be happy
that I remember you
Do you remember me?
we were the outcasts
The otherones
the ones that just keeps up
Do you remember
that you fighted?
And that I consoled you
when you were sad
I remember you
do you remember me?
I miss you
do you miss me?
Do you think the same
as I do
Do we both
miss eachother
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| Kommentarer |
| Nellas - 20 mar 07 - 05:33 |
| Hm, egentligen borde det stå där nere på min kommentar : Jättebra dikt i övrigt! =D Fast sorglig känsla, är nog med om samma sak just nu... |
| janam - 27 feb 07 - 09:01 |
| dear friend i dont know who you are but i like your poem.;-) |
| Nellas - 27 feb 07 - 03:29 |
Lite för många grammatiska fel (Vet inte om jag ser i syne eller om du vill ha det så)
t.ex. alredy/already? "I don't want to lose you, but I already did." Blir inte det Jag vill inte förlora dig men det gjorde jag? (oops nu såg jag att det såg bra ut)
En till sak, I stavas alltid med stort I. Du har råkat missa det på ett par ställen.
Bra dikt i övrigt. Tror jag har varit med om ungefär samma sak. |
